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Jämför Noas första utkast med den nya versionen. Lär dig göra din egen text tydligare, mer exakt och bättre sammanbunden för den som läser.

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Läs ditt utkast som mottagaren: vem läser, och vad behöver hen veta? Saknas vem, var, när eller varför? Stryk det som upprepas.

Precisera och variera: byt vaga ord mot exakta. Good kan bli delicious, exciting eller helpful, thing kan bli the match eller the cake, nice kan bli friendly. Använd inte samma ord i varje mening.

Bind ihop och ordna: slå ihop korta meningar med and, but, because eller so. Sätt det viktigaste först i ett meddelande, eller berätta i den ordning det hände.

Utkast: “The trip was good. We went. It was good. The food was good.” — Bearbetat: “The class trip to Kolmården was exciting because we saw dolphins, and the pizza at lunch was delicious.”

Noa's café review

First draft: The café is good. I went there. The food is good. It is on Park Street. I went on Saturday. The staff is nice. The cakes are good and the drinks are good. You should go. New version: Last Saturday I visited Bean & Bun, a small café on Park Street. The staff were friendly and helped me choose. The chocolate cake was delicious, and the hot apple drink was perfect on a cold day. However, it was very crowded, so go early. I really recommend it!

Källor

  1. Kursplan i engelska, Lgr22, Skolverket